Feedback on Draft

Yesterday, I handed in my draft of my treatment and I received some feedback on it during today's lesson. 

• Boy gives the girl a different outlook, e.g. on why the dad might be feeling and acting the way has been
• Or the girl realises how much the boy means to her and then she loses him and realises why the dad has been feeling and acting that way
• Both the daughter and the father have to realise, not just the father
• Have to link in the boy to the reunification 
• Make the bit where the boy is in the story bigger and the journey smaller
• Condense the journey (where she is placing all the clues in the different locations) by making it a montage
• Shot list: make the shot notes more specific and write what the shot is of, rather than just camera notes

During today's lesson and this afternoon, I will be editing my storyline so that the section where the boy is in will have a purpose and will be connected to the ending of the story. I will also reduce the journey and make the part with the boy a bigger aspect of the story. After I finish that, I will be able to complete my synopsis in the next lesson and finish off my shot list.

Images Used For Inspiration

I have been looking through my folder of stills from various Wes Anderson films and have collated some of my favourite in a collage. The images below really represent the aesthetic I am going for with my upcoming film and the style I want to portray. I will be using these for inspiration for my shot types. 

• The shot of the book is inspiration for the first shots of my film which will be of the autobiography sitting on the desk
• The letters are what I will base the look of the screenshots of Mary's letter on; I will be scanning the letter and placing it in front of a textured image
• The shot of the woman sitting on the bed is similar to the shot I will be taking of the father in the beginning of the film
• The character of Suzy Bishop has really inspired my with my main character of Mary and the shot of her looking through the binoculars is similar to that of what I will be doing
• There is also a shot of a little yellow box which is the same style as the suitcase I will be using and the map from Moonrise Kingdom has inspired me with the map I will be creating in my film

Wednesday 19 July

During today's lesson, I began writing my treatment. I complied my list of resources, including props, settings and character profiles, then wrote my introduction. I began to write my synopsis, but I found it kind of difficult to start so I decided it would be easier if I wrote my shot list beforehand. I am quite happy with the idea that I have, although it still needs a bit of refining before the due date, and I am happy with how I am going in terms of time management. This term, I have spent my class time concentrating really hard on my design and getting it sorted out instead of leaving it more last minute, and I am a lot more organised with writing it. I am going to continue working on my shot list this afternoon for homework and will try to get the majority of it done so that I can write my treatment during Friday's lesson.

Ideas for Music

• Hey Jude: The Beatles
• Gymnopédie No. 1: Erik Satie
• These Days: Nico
• Love: Nancy Adams
• Fly: Nick Drake
• Needle in the Hay: Elliot Smith
• Oh Yoko!: John Lennon
• Mr. Fox in the Fields
• Mr. Moustafa
• B Side: San Cisco

Locations, Props and Costumes

Locations:

·      Home

o   Parents’ bedroom

o   My bedroom

o   Kitchen

·      Cemetery

·      Coomera Lake

o   Fishing area

o   Bridge

·      Mt Tamborine

o   Cedar Creek Falls

o   Thunderbird Park area

·      Field opposite Highland Reserve

·      Under the bridge at Chevron Island

Props:

·      Binoculars

·      Record player (as the suitcase)

·      Flowers

·      Grave

·      Blue surgery gloves + white face mask

·      Bowl of popcorn + muffin on plate

·      Tray of baked goods

·      Classic novel

·      Autobiography + parcel packaging

·      Letter + clues

·      Map

Bandage for father’s injury    

Costumes:

Mary (young):

·       Vintage dress/overalls

·       Jellies/canvas shoes

·       Vintage sunglasses

·       Blue eyeshadow

Hair worn out with one side pinned

Mary (older):

·       Robe

·       Slippers

·       Blue eyeshadow

Hair worn out with one side pinned

Eric:

·       Tank top/t-shirt

·       Jeans/long pants

·       Vans/Docs

·       Glasses

Hair slicked back/to the side

Father:

·       Robe

·       Slippers

Later: old shirt, shorts